Hi there Woojung,

Thank you for submitting your homework. Based on what I see in you, You have a lot of talents aside from being a photographer and a comedian. You can be a pianist too because you are good in it.. Good luck for your future career.

Please take notes of my corrections.. Thank you.

In the future I want to be an photographer because I like to take picturea and people sas I am really good at taking pictures.

Correct: I want to be a photographer in the future. I like to take pictures . People say I am really good at taking pictures.

** Use a period (.) to form a declarative sentence.
** We usually out the time expressions at the end of the sentence.

I also want to be a gag mam because I feel happy when I made someone funny and my parents says I am the great daughter because I make them fun and they says I am funny man.

Correct: I also want to be a comedian because I feel happy when I make someone laugh. My parents said I am a great daughter because I can make them happy. They also said that I am a funny person.

** Use " comedian"  to mean someone who entertains people by telling jokes.
** Use "laugh" to mean to smile and make sounds with your voice because something is funny.
** Use " can" to mean you are able to do something.