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Student: When was the last time that I got fed up is today.
Correct: When was The last time that I got fed up is today.

Explanation: We remove "When" because it is used for a question.
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Student: It was a lunch time. And I ate lunch quickly.
Correct: It was a lunch time and I ate lunch quickly.

Explanation: Please observe capitalization.
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Student: In our class, my teacher said "You can played phone game in lunch time. So our class can play phone game. Because of this rule,

Correct: In our class, my teacher said "You can played phone games in lunch time." So our class can play phone games because of this rule.

Explanation: We use present tense to describe actions that are habitual.
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Student: I played phonegame with my friends.
Correct: I played phone games with my friends.

Explanation: We put "-s" because there are many kinds of phone games.
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Student: We played 'Minecraft PE' but it wasn't survival.
Correct: We played 'Minecraft PE' but it wasn't survival mode.

Explanation: "mode" -  a way of operating; For games, it is common to use the word mode to describe what kind of game are you playing.
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Student: Today, we played content called 'Minefarm'. like yesterday.
Correct: Today, we played the mode called 'Minefarm', like yesterday.

Explanation: For games, it is common to use the word mode to describe what kind of game are you playing.
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Student: The 'Minefarm' is we had ownfarm. And we earned the money.
Correct: In 'Minefarm', is we had our own farm and we earned the money.

Explanation: We should use the preposition "In" to indicate a specific location or thing. We use present tense to describe actions that are habitual.
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Student: I was very happy, so I telled my friend. "Please open server fast!"
Correct: I was very happy, so I told my friend, "Please open the server fast!"

Explanation: Use the article THE before a specific noun. The past tense of tell is "told".
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Student: We can fight eachother, and we can fight mobs also.
Correct: We can fight each other and mobs, too.

Explanation: It is better to write your sentence this way to avoid repetition.
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Student: Yesterday, I earned 5000. So I had a lot of money.
Correct: Yesterday, I earned 5000. So I have a lot of money.

Explanation: We use "have" because "a lot of money" is plural.
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Student: Few minute later, server was open. I entered the server, and played the game.
Correct: Few minutes later, the server was open. So, I entered the server and played the game.

Explanation: Use the article THE before a specific noun. We put the word "So," to indicate the action that you did when the server opened.
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Student: And all of my friend entered the server also. Then, there are two friend same name "choi".

Correct: Also, all of my friends entered the server. Then, there are two players who has the same name, "Choi."

Explanation: "Players" is a better term to use in gaming.
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Student: I got a fed, because someone did bad joke.
Correct: I got a fed up because someone did bad joke.

Explanation: "fed up" is the appropriate expression.
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Student: And he used cheat, and sprinkled lava. So the farm was a fire.
Correct: He used cheat and sprinkled lava so the farm was on fire.

Explanation: No need to use "and". The preposition "on" is used when referring to the surface of something
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Student: Then the order turned off the server. And used water to turned out the fire.
Correct: Then the order turned off the server and used water to put out the fire.

Explanation: "put" is the appropriate term to use.
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Student: Few minute later, server is opened. I and my friends found someone did badjoke.

Correct: Few minutes later, server opened. My friends and I looked for the player who did the bad joke.

Explanation: "looked" and "player" should be the terms used in the sentence.
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Student: Then, we found him, we hit him and "Don't do anything our server!".
Correct: Then, we found him, we hit him and said "Don't do anything to our server!"

Explanation: The preposition "to" is used to indicate a direction, goal, or objective.
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Student: I and my friends got fed up, but we patiented.
Correct: My friends and I got fed up, but we stayed patiented.

Explanation: "stayed" should be added in your sentence to make it correct.
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Student: After a while, we played minefarm again.
Correct: After a while, we played Minefarm again.

Explanation: Please capitalize letter "M" because the game is a proper noun.
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Student: This work is over. but we don't know he can do bad joke again and again.
Correct: This work is over but we don't know if he'll do a bad joke again and again.

Explanation: It's better to write your sentence this way if you're trying to say that you're worried because he can do a bad joke again.
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********************TEACHER'S COMMENT*****************

HELLO, LINA!

I am really surprised with your homework. I didn't expect that you'll submit something this long. Don't worry, I am happy about it. Thank you so much for submitting your homework. Keep up the good work. Please check the corrections. I'll be seeing you again tomorrow.

Teacher Claire