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essay about playing musical instruments

작성자 : woo***   ·   2014-11-17

I like to play piano. When I am playing the piano, it feels like my finger moving by itself and feels happy, and great.
My brother thinks he does really great at piano but in real he can only do airplane well. He is really bad at piano. I learned piano nearly 3 years and I can do well but he only learned 3 or 4 months because he was bad at piano.

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Hello Woojung,

Thank you for submitting your homework.. Wow so you are really good at playing piano more than your brother. Maybe I will ask his opinion about it.. ahahaha...

Please take notes of my corrections. Thank you..

I like to play piano. -Correct

When I'm playing the piano, it feels like my finger moving by itself and feels happy, and great.

Correct: When I play the piano, it feels like my fingers are moving on their own. I feel happy and great.

** Use a present simple tense when talking about regular activities or facts.
** On its / their own = unaccompanied by others or alone.
** Use a period (.) to form a declarative sentence.

My brother thinks he does really great at piano but in real he can only do airplane well.

Correct: My brother thinks he's really good at playing piano but it's not. I think his forte is doing something that is related to airplane.

** Use a period (.) to form a declarative sentence.
** Be careful with the word order.
** Use "forte" to mean a strong ability or something that a person can do well.

He is really bad at piano.

Correct: He cannot play piano well.

** Use "cannot", the negative form of can,  to mean not able to do it well.
** Use "well" to mean in a good way, to a high or satisfactory standard.

I learned piano nearly 3 years and I can do well but he only learned 3 or 4 months because he was bad at piano.

Correct: I had learned playing piano for 3 years that's why I can play it well unlike my brother. He had just learned for 3 or 4 months because he was not good at it.

** When talking about the past, we use the past perfect to go back to an earlier past time, to refer to something that had already happened or had been happening.
** Use "unlike" to mean different from (something/ someone).


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