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작성자 : kwa***   ·   2014-11-13

I think violence shown in films caused increasing of violent crime. In every action films, there is violence like killing. Children can say bad words which they saw in films and bully other students. If they grow up watching cruel and violence films, they might do things that they saw in films when they were young. There are limits like ‘under – years old children can’t see this film.’ But they often ignore them and watch it. In CGV, people usually let children to see films that they can’t see or children sneak into the screen room to watch them. That can’t ban children from watching cruel films so, in some films, they play sounds, not pictures. I like the way how people removed cruel scenes without removing anxious feelings. I think people need to improve the ways to not let children to watch bad films.

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I think violence shown in films caused increasing of violent crime. In every action films, there is violence like killing. Children can say bad words which they saw in films and bully other students. If they grow up watching cruel and violence films, they might do things that they saw in films when they were young. There are limits like ?under ? years old children can?t see this film.? But they often ignore them and watch it. In CGV, people usually let children to see films that they can?t see or children sneak into the screen room to watch them. That can?t ban children from watching cruel films so, in some films, they play sounds, not pictures. I like the way how people removed cruel scenes without removing anxious feelings. I think people need to improve the ways to not let children to watch bad films.


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I think violence shown in films caused the high rate of violent crime. In every action films, there is violence like killing. Children say bad words which they hear from films and bully other students. If they grow up watching cruel and violent films, they might imitate the things they saw in films when they were young. There is age limit for the films they show, but they often ignore them and watch it. In CGV, people usually let children to see films that they prohibited to see or children sneak into the screen room to watch them. That can?t ban children from watching cruel films, so in some films they play sounds not pictures. I like the way how people censor cruel scenes without removing anxious feelings. I think people need to improve the ways to prevent children from watching bad films.

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