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Student: There are Ningan who has small office.
Correction: There is Ningan who has a small office.

Correction: We use "is" because Ningan is singular. We use the article 'a' because it refers to a particular or certain one of a class or group thing.

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Student: Oneday,she droped by at she's office.
Correction: One day, she dropped by at her office.

Explanation: Please observe your spacing and spelling. We use the possessive pronoun 'her' to show ownership or possession.

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Student: She turn on the computer and do her work.
Correction: She turned on the computer and did her work.

Explanation: We add the suffix "-ed" because it's already done in the past and changed the word "do" to past tense.

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Student: When she focus in her work, she looked at big spider. She is absentminded.
Correction: When she was focused in her work, she looked at a big spider. She was absentminded.

Explanation: We add the suffix "-ed", put the words "was" because it's already done in the past. We use the article 'a' because it refers to a particular or certain one of a class or group thing.

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Student: Few minutes later, she recover consciousness She frightened by spider.
Correction: Few minutes later, she recovered her consciousness and she was frightened by the spider.

Explanation: We add the suffix "-ed", put the words "was" because it's already done in the past. We use the possessive pronoun 'her' to show ownership or possession. The  article "the" is used especially before a noun or nouns like people or things.

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Student: And she cried "Oh My God!!!!!!!!!!" Then, there came out lots of spiders.
Correction: CORRECT!!
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Student: She knew how to did this. Rightaway, She called to 911.
Correction: She knew how to handle this. Right away, she called to 911.

Explanation: Please check your spacing and capitalization. We use the word "handle" because it is the appropriate term.

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Student: Fortunately, There were a fire fighter look around her office just in time.
Correction: Fortunately, there was a firefighter look around her office just in time.

Explanation: Observe capitalization and spelling/spacing. We changed "was" to "were" because "was" is for singular and "were" is for plural.

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Student: So the fire fighter killed a lot of spiders.
Correction: So the firefighter killed a lot of spiders.

Explanation: Please check your spelling/spacing.

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Student: Now, she sometime ask like this. "Have you ever been frightened by sudden aggression from a lot of spiders?"
Correction: Now, she sometimes ask like this, "Have you ever been frightened by sudden aggression from a lot of spiders?"

Explanation: Please check the spelling. Observe proper placement of comma.

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Student: Well, there are no one say 'yes' except her.
Correction: Well, there are no one who said 'yes' except her.

Explanation: We used the word "who" because it is the subject of the sentence, and changed the word "say" to past tense because the action is done.

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*************TEACHER'S COMMENT**************

Hello, Lina! Wow, you really like making stories. If we keep on practicing English, I know that you can be a great writer someday. I really enjoy reading your stories. Please check your corrections, mostly are common mistakes (past tense, spelling and capitalization). I know that you can do better on your next story.

Keep it up, Lina! I'll see you tomorrow.

- Teacher Claire