Student: I want to gobackpacking with my friends to Europe. I had never been in Europebefore. Once I go to other countries, I always went with my friends &their mom and my mom or my cousins. They (adults) plan all the thingslike hotel and place to go. I want to go by myself but I'm notadult yet and I don't have money. It is hard to travel alone inthis age. But when I become adults and have enough money fortravelling, I want to be in country in Europe with my friends. I canmeet new cultures in real life, not in television. And, I might beable to be proud of myself if I plan all the schedules and do what Iplanned. It will be so fun to go backpacking with my friends.

Corrections:

I want to go backpacking with my friends INEurope. I had never been to Europe before. WHENI WENT to other countries, I always GOwith my friends and their moms, my mom or my cousins. The ADULTSplan EVERYTHING likeTHE hotel and PLACESto go. I want to go by myself, but I'm not ANadult yet and I don't have money. It is hard to travel alone ATthis age. But when I become ANADULT and have enough money for TRAVELLING,I want to be in EUROPE withmy friends. I can see THE CULTUREin real life AND not intelevision. And I WILL BEproud of myself if I plan the schedules and BEABLE TO do what Iplanned. It will be so fun to go backpacking with my friends.

* "I want to go backpacking with my friends INEurope."

Reason: Thepreposition 'in' is used to indicate a location or place.

* "WHEN I WENTto other countries"

Reason: Instead ofsaying, "Once I go to", which means that you are going tothat place in the future, you should say "When I went to"to start when you want to say what you did after you went to thatplace or those places.

* "I always GOwith my friends..."

Reason: You can alsosay "I always went", but it is more acceptable to say "Ialways go".

* "The ADULTSplan EVERYTHING like THEhotel and PLACES to go."

* "I'm not ANadult yet..."

* "When I become ANADULT"

Reason: You canindicate your mom and your friends' moms as "adults" andinstead of "all the things" you can just say"everything". Also, bemindful of articles like "a, an, the" and the singular andplural forms.