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작성자 : shi***   ·   2014-10-15

If I am an athlete
I am not good at any sports. However, today, I thought about what do I want to do when I am an athlete.
Most of athletes are good at the sport they are practicing. Some of them are not!!! They just practice and became better! At that part, I think I have to be a soccer player. Because the only sports I like is soccer. If I practice it hard, maybe I can be a soccer player. At my school, they teach me about how to play soccer. I now how to now. It is improving. Last time, I thought that soccer is played by just kicking. I was so silly. I will practice a lot. Even though I don’t want to be an athlete!!!!! Because sports can make me healthy and grow a lot. I hope other people know these rules.
1 not to follow other people’s dreams.
2 work for your own dream.
3 have a positive mind.

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If I could be an athlete

I am not good at any sport. However, today, I thought about what would I want to do if I could be an athlete.
Most of athletes are good at the sport they are practicing. Some of them are not!!! They just practice and became better! At that part, I think I have to be a soccer player. Because the only sport I like is soccer. If I practice it hard, maybe I can be a soccer player. At my school, they teach me about how to play soccer. I know how to, now. It is improving. Last time, I thought that soccer is played by just kicking. I was so silly. I will practice a lot. Even though I don???t want to be an athlete!!!!! Because sports can make me healthy and grow a lot. I hope other people know these rules.
1 not to follow other people???s dreams.
2 work for your own dream.
3 have a positive mind.


Explanation: We use any to mean one when it is not important which one. Again, we use would to talk about a situation that you can imagine happening. Most of the people would usually refer to a specific group of people. Most people means the majority of people.

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