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Fats!!!!!!!!!!!

작성자 : shi***   ·   2014-10-14

Dieting and making our body unhealthy is different!!!
Most of people thinks that the fats are related to our beauty. But why?
When I asked my oldest cousin, she said it was because that they think that all of them thinks that if they are thin, they will be popular!! I felt like I had hit by a pouring rain!!☂☂☂☂☂ Why would they think that fat is important to their beauty? I want to say something for them. sometimes they have to burn the fat, because they need to be healthy. But there are do’s and don’ts!!!!
<You have to exercise. Some does not exercise because they don’t want to. But for your health, you should!!!!
< Eat food with less calories. It will help you to become healthy.
< Eat fruit for snacks. It is good because if you eat cookies, you should have a lot of calories.
<You have to eat meals. They give you energy. And when you don’t, you will be hungry and gain your fat!!
I think I have to obey an follow these rules, so I will be healthy everytime.

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Dieting and making our body unhealthy is different!!!
Most people think that the fats are related to our beauty. But why?
When I asked my oldest cousin, she said it was because that they think that all of them think that if they are thin, they would be popular!! I felt like I was hit by a pouring rain!!☂☂☂☂☂?@Why would they think that fat is important to their beauty? I want to say something for them. Sometimes they have to burn the fats because they need to be healthy. But there are do?fs and don?fts!!!!
<You have to exercise. Some do not exercise because they don?ft want to. But for your health, you should!!!!
< Eat food with less calories. It will help you to become healthy.
< Eat fruit for snacks. It is good because if you eat cookies, you would take lot of calories.
<You have to eat meals. They give you energy. And when you don?ft, you will be hungry and gain your fat!!
I think I have to obey and follow these rules, so I will be healthy everytime.

Explanation: We use would to talk about a situation that you can imagine happening. Most of the people would usually refer to a specific group of people. Most people means the majority of people.

Hello Julie! Apply the corrections in your next homework! Please do take note the difference between Most people and Most of the people.:)

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