The water pool

I went to a water park with my cousin and my family.
It was really fun. Mom bought me ice cream. Wow! After eating, we went inside to the pool. It was really great. I like to go to the powerful pool, so I went there with mom and my cousin. My cousin was sinking and I was yelling. Mom was holding the tube dangerously. But I liked it. After one ride, my cousin was furious and mom was panting. However, I asked for one more ride and they were not giving time to get the tube. So I had to ride non-fun things. The only thing I liked was the water bumps.
The next day, mom said it was time to go back. So I had to pack up and lived the pool. I wanted to go there again. And I will ride the water bumps and powerful rides, too!!

Explanation: Again, be consistent of your verb tense. When you use the past tense, make sure to use it to the rest of your sentences when necessary. Ice cream is the general term when there are two or more of it. It's odd to say ice creams.

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