====CORRECTIONS===

Sang Hyup: The novel is about a love story occurred in a ship.
Correct: The novel is about a love story that occurred in a ship.
Explanation: "That" is both an ordinary and a tricky word. Use that for things, events and who/whom for people.

Sang Hyup: the ship Titanic was a British passenger liner that sank in the North Atlantic Ocean...
Correct: The ship Titanic was a British passenger liner that sank in the North Atlantic Ocean...

Sang Hyup: during the voyage, a man and a women fall in love immediately in a first glance.
Correct: During the voyage, a man and a women fall in love immediately in a first glance.

Sang Hyup: in the sinking ship, the man sacrificed himself to protect her. at the end of the story...
Correct: In the sinking ship, the man sacrificed himself to protect her. at the end of the story...

***Explanation: CAPITALIZE the first word of a document and the first word after a period.

Sang Hyup: However, their love weren't easy since the man was the common people and the women was noble.
Correct: However, their love wasn't easy since the man was a common people and the women was a noble.
Explanation: You are pertaining to the word "love" so the be-verb "weren't" should be changed into "wasn't" for singular subject. Then be consistent on the use of the article "a" for it specifies an unspecific noun instead of using article "the" which is used for "specific" nouns.

Sang Hyup: During the trip, they spent unforgettable time.
Correct: During the trip, they spent unforgettable times.
Explanation: The word "time" should be in plural form for this sentence because it means that the had a lot of unforgettable times together for a short period of time. That means that they're always together and making the most out of it.

Sang Hyup: the man was died..
Correct: the man died..
Explanation: The word "died" is already in past tense so you can already eliminate the word "was" to avoid redundancy.

                                       ===NOTES===
Hello Sang Hyup! Thank you for submitting your homework! A job well done for your weekly activity about a book report "Titanic". Carry on! Keep in mind the corrections that I made. Let's see each other again on Monday! Take Care! Have a happy weekend!

~Teacher Carrie