===========CORRECTED SENTENCES===========

One day, Tae-yeon had a doll, and the doll's name was Spany. After one day, her younger brother, Tae-min had a doll, too. Its name was Odi. But Odi became alive and started to crash the things, eat a lot of food and tried to hit them. So, Odi was trashed by them. But a pretty girl named Mi-o brought Odi to her house. Odi did the same things as he did in Tae-yeon's house. Mi-o was only 6years old, so she was very scared. So, she killed herself. Surprising thing was, Odi died at the same time. (Odi dies when other people die.)

                            ===========REMINDERS===========

* Dolls can't become real persons but they can BECOME ALIVE if there is a spirit inside. Use BECOME ALIVE instead in your sentence.

* Articles in our sentences are very essential but you should learn when to use them and when not to use them. Always remember that we use the article "THE" before a particular and definite subject.

* Past tense of TRY is TRIED. Use it because you are talking about a story from the past. Learning verb tenses is quite tricky but if you practice everyday, you could get the hang of it. Learning this is very essential and helpful in construction sentences correctly.

* Use SCARED instead of SCARY. The -ed adjectives describe the way you feel.

* You can't die yourself because DIE is not a verb. You can only KILL yourself.

* Check your spelling of SURPRISING. Spelling is very important when it comes to writing compositions as to be understood by the reader clearly. Remember to double check your composition before submitting it :)

                              ===========NOTE===========

Hello Tae Yeon! Wow! That was really creepy. Teacher got scared by reading this. Thank you for sharing this story you made on your own. Make sure to take note the different reminders I have for you! Study hard! Take care~ :)

From Teacher Rose