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작성자 : ksj*** · 2014-08-25
I've been dreamed my future house which has large living room with no television.
The reason why I think it as most important condition of my dream house is conversation among familiy members.
Almost of Korean houses have big television at living room, but there is no doubt that it disturbs the conversation among family.
However, my house has one of biggest television at living room at present. There are two reasons why I had to give up my dream house.
At first, the wife is more powerful than the husband in Korean society.
At second, my wife likes to watch television sitting on couch.
At last, as additional reason, I love my wife yet. (^^)
The reason why I think it as most important condition of my dream house is conversation among familiy members.
Almost of Korean houses have big television at living room, but there is no doubt that it disturbs the conversation among family.
However, my house has one of biggest television at living room at present. There are two reasons why I had to give up my dream house.
At first, the wife is more powerful than the husband in Korean society.
At second, my wife likes to watch television sitting on couch.
At last, as additional reason, I love my wife yet. (^^)
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KWON:
I've been dreamed my future house which has large living room with no television. The reason why I think it as most important condition of my dream house is conversation among familiy members. Almost of Korean houses have big television at living room, but there is no doubt that it disturbs the conversation among family. However, my house has one of biggest television at living room at present. There are two reasons why I had to give up my dream house. At first, the wife is more powerful than the husband in Korean society. At second, my wife likes to watch television sitting on couch. At last, as additional reason, I love my wife yet. (^^)
CORRECTION:
I have dreamt (I have dreamed) about my future house which has a living room without a television. I think that the most important thing I want to have in my dream house is to build strong communication among family members. Almost, all of the Korean houses have big television at living room, but there is no doubt that it could disturb the conversation among family. However, my house has one of the biggest television at the living room at present. There are two reasons why I had to give up my dream house. First, the wife is more powerful than the husband in Korean society.
EXPLANATION:
1. The word "dreamed" versus "dreamt." Dreamt is the norm in Britain and Australia. Dreamed is more common in the U.S., though some people use dreamt.
2. Always remember the the articles or determiners such as "The","a", and "an". It will help you emphasized the subject or it also helps you make your sentences much better.
3." At" is a preposition which is not applicable on using for words that emphasized ordering or sequencing of events.
COMMENT:
Hi Sir Kwon! You did well with your homework. I was amazed by your opinions and belief. I learned something from your work. Thank you and please keep up the good work. I wish you all the best on your degree paper. Have a great time out there and good-bye!
-Teacher Joanna
I've been dreamed my future house which has large living room with no television. The reason why I think it as most important condition of my dream house is conversation among familiy members. Almost of Korean houses have big television at living room, but there is no doubt that it disturbs the conversation among family. However, my house has one of biggest television at living room at present. There are two reasons why I had to give up my dream house.
CORRECTION:
I have dreamt (I have dreamed) about my future house which has a living room without a television. I think that the most important thing I want to have in my dream house is to build strong communication among family members. Almost, all of the Korean houses have big television at living room, but there is no doubt that it could disturb the conversation among family. However, my house has one of the biggest television at the living room at present. There are two reasons why I had to give up my dream house. First, the wife is more powerful than the husband in Korean society.
EXPLANATION:
1. The word "dreamed" versus "dreamt." Dreamt is the norm in Britain and Australia. Dreamed is more common in the U.S., though some people use dreamt.
2. Always remember the the articles or determiners such as "The","a", and "an". It will help you emphasized the subject or it also helps you make your sentences much better.
3." At" is a preposition which is not applicable on using for words that emphasized ordering or sequencing of events.
COMMENT:
Hi Sir Kwon! You did well with your homework. I was amazed by your opinions and belief. I learned something from your work. Thank you and please keep up the good work. I wish you all the best on your degree paper. Have a great time out there and good-bye!
-Teacher Joanna