Fun sports time!!!

Kin was happy because he could play soccer. He asked his friends to come over to his house. However, his friends said that they couldn't. Kin knew why.
Last weekend, Kin was playing soccer with his best friend, Din. Din looked happy. Kin was on his team!!! But, their mother hated playing. Kin's mom asked to play chess instead.♖♕♔♗♘. They hated chess. They went out secretly and started to play soccer. Kin kicked the ball to his side!! After that, Kin's friends, even his best friends didn't wanted to play soccer with him and he was unhappy.
¡§Din, can you come over to my house and play soccer?¡¨
¡§Emmmm.............. okay.¡¨ Din replied.
After the school, Kin was glad to see Din at his home. Din said, ¡§Let's do our homework?o first.¡¨ Kin was disappointed.
¡§Why are everyone are trying not to play soccer with me?¡¨ Kin said, ¡§ The accident of last week was just a mistake.¡¨
Din said, ¡§ I guess I have tell other friends about that.¡¨ ¡§Really!!! I will!!!!¡¨
And since Din told about it, their mother and their friends agreed to help Kim play soccer very well.

Julie: Kin was happy.☺☺ He can play soccer now. He asked his friends to come over to his house.
Correct: Kin was happy because he could play soccer. He asked his friends to come over to his house.
Explanation: Remember that if you're writing in the present tense, don't shift to the past tense (or vice versa) unless you have a good reason to do so. Since you started the sentence using the past tense, then use it to the rest of the statements because you are talking about a story that happened in the past.

Julie: Last weekend, Kin was playing soccer at his best friend, Din.
Correct: Last weekend, Kin was playing soccer with his best friend, Din.
Explanation: The preposition with is used to say that people or things are in a place together or are doing something together.

Julie: Kin's mom asked to play chess.♖♕♔♗♘.
Correct: Kin's mom asked to play chess instead.♖♕♔♗♘.
Explanation: To make your sentence more understandable and creative, you can add the word instead. It is used in the place of someone or something else. For example, There's no chicken ¡V would you like lamb instead?

Julie: They went out secretly and started soccer.
Correct: They went out secretly and started to play soccer.
Explanation: An infinitive is used with nouns or pronouns, to indicate what something can be used for, or what is to be done with it. It's form is to + verb.

Hello, Julie! Nice work! Study the corrections made so that you can apply them when writing compositions. Thank you for submitting your homework. See you in the class!:)