Hello Tom! ^^ Thank you for submitting your homework today. Kindly take note of the corrections that I made. Thank you! ^

Tom:before I turn 30. I would like to do these things.
Correct: Before I turn 30,  I would like to do the following things:
Explanation: Begin your sentences with a capital letter. Use comma in connecting sentences.

Tom: I want to go to the world tour before I turn 30. Because I want to experience many things.
Correct: I want to have a world tour before I turn 30 because I want to experience many things.
Explanation: Be careful in choosing the words that you use. You may connect two sentences with a subordinating conjunction "because".

I'll have a my own house. -Correct

Tom: I want to meet with many facinating figures that help my mental cultivate.
Correct: I want to see fascinating figures that will improve my intelligence.
Explanation: If you are not sure with the spelling of a word, don't hesitate to check your dictionary.

I'll develop my abilities in cooking by myself. -Correct

Tom: I want to meet the person who live with me during mt remain life.
Correct: I want to meet the person whom I will spend the rest of my life with.
 Explanation: Learn how to simplify your sentence. ^^

Thank you and take care, Tom! ^^