I think that I should improve my speaking and writingskills of Chinese. I have studied Chinese Since last year. Therefore,I can't speak Chinese well and I don't know a lot of Chinesecharacters. It is very hard to write Chinese characters because weshould remember all of the words. We can use alphabet to write wordsin English but, each words have their own meanings in Chinese. Also,there are different pronunciations in Chinese. It is hard topronounce and there are intonations which can change the meaning ofword if you make mistake.
I need to know more Chinese words andremember them though they are very difficult. If there are some wordsthat I can't understand, I will ask to my parents or teachers themeaning and pronunciation. I can study the words again which Ialready finished studying. Also, I will try to speak more Chinese inthe academies and at the outside.
I wish I can speak Chinese wellenough to chat with Chinese friends before I return to Korea. Beforethat time, I will try to improve my Chinese more.

Corrections:

Ithink that it would be better for me to improve my speaking andwriting skills in Chinese than in English language. I have beenstudying Chinese since last year, but I still can't speak Chinesewell and I don't know a lot of Chinese characters yet. Compared toEnglish which uses the letters of the alphabet to write words,Chinese uses characters that have different strokes which make itvery hard to understand. I would then have to remember each words oneby one. Also, there are different pronunciations in Chinese. Thewords are hard to pronounce and a slight difference in intonation canchange the meaning of the word.

Ineed to know more Chinese words and remember them though it will bedifficult. If there would be some words that I wouldn't understand, Ican ask assistance from my parents or teachers. I can review thewords again which I already studied. I will also try to practicespeaking Chinese inside and outside the academy. I wish I could speakChinese well enough to chat with my Chinese friends before returningto Korea. That's why before I leave, I will try hard to improve myskills in this language.

Feedback:

It is very nice to know that you wantto improve your Chinese communication skills. I wish you good luckand I hope you will come to familiarize yourself more with thelanguage. Anyhow, there are some things that I want you to take note.

1. The question I gave you was notanswered properly. It is alright that you described how determinedyou are to improve your Chinese communication skills, but it wouldhave been better if you described how to step up in English, as well.

2. The message of the composition wasclear although, there are some grammar lapses. 'would and could' aremore appropriate to use in conditional sentences than 'will and can'.

3. There were some redundant sentenceswhich you could have combined in one.

4. Parallelism is also important. Ifyou used a complex sentence, and the first clause used an infinitive,make the second clause parallel by using another infinitive.

Please study the corrections and trynot to commit the same mistake in your next compositions. You can doit! ^_^