Monsoon season and the storms

In summer, usually at the end of summer, it is rainy and storm comes with rain. It is because it is monsoon season. Monsoon means the season that rain poor down with wind blowing. In Korea, the monsoon season is passed. So I have experience about it.

It was lunch time. The school would be ended soon. When I walked to my classroom, I heard noises. Some people were shocked and some were screaming. I saw the rain, thunder and lightning. Crash!
Everyone screamed. Teachers ran to their class. Teachers said to finish writing the notice and packed their bags. With another BOOOM, it became dark. Dark. Teachers let the class end and all of the students spread out to the halls. The principal said, "What heck-" But because of lightning, we ran out. When I was wearing shoes, rain and wind blew. I felt I would fly. Some trees looked like they would uprooted. The umbrellas were useless. They broke. The storm began. It was the most terrible storm this year.

Julie: The school will be ended soon.
Correct: The school would be ended soon.
Explanation: Will should be in past tense which is would.

Julie: Some people were shocked and some are them were screaming.
Correct: Some people were shocked and some were screaming.
Explanation: It's okay not to put people, just say some were screaming since you put people at the beginning of the sentence.

Julie: I saw it. the rain and thunder and lightning.
Correct: I saw the rain, thunder and lightning.
Explanation: You can omit it and combine the three: rain, thunder and lightning.

Julie:  Some trees looked like they will uprooted.
Correct: Some trees looked like they would uprooted.
Explanation: Will should be in past tense which is would.

Hello Julie! Great job on this homework! Just be careful of the correct verb tense that you'll use. See you in class.:)