Andrew: I try to practice to have my dream talents.
Correct: I try to practice to achieve my dream talents.
Explanation: The word "achieve" means to reach or to obtain by effort.

Andrew: In television, many talent people show us various contents
Correct: On Television, we can see many people with various talents.
Explanation: The preposition "on" is used when referring to the surface of something, days and dates, a device or a machine, part of the body, and state of something.

Andrew: What is talent? Answer is patient and passion.
Correct: How can we achieve the talents that we have been dreaming of? It's through our patient and passion.

Andrew:  And I put my goal into action as well. Even though I make little bit money, I could just not mind it.
Correct: . On my part,I put my goal into action. It doesn't matter if I only have small amount of money.
Explanation: The pronoun "it" is used to represent a concept or idea understood or previously stated.

Andrew: Because if I run my goal constantly, that is enough for me.
Correct: It's because if I run my goal constantly, then it is enough for me.
Explanation: The pronoun "it" is used to represent a concept or  idea understood or previously stated.

Andrew: I'll need passion,action and endless practice So, I'll have more and more my dream talents..
Correct: I'll need passion, some actions and endless practice so I could achive the talents that I would want to have.

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Hi, Andrew! I admire the fact that you are positive and determined when it comes to your dreams. I am certain that someday, you will be able to achieve them. Stay positive, Andrew!

-Teacher Isabel