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Home work-Useful expression(parents&children)
작성자 : san*** · 2014-07-07
- I think that sometimes living with parents for a long time has negative impact on their children. Children need sense of independence in order to be successful in their life. However, It's difficult to get this kinds of sense for a child who is living with their parents for a long time since they are heavily dependent on their parents. Therefore, If parents really want a child to be successful they should try a child to get a sense of independence during early ages.
10. One reason so many children are seen on the streets at night is because they're afraid to stay home alone.
- Yes, It's a very important problem in modern days. Theses days, most panrents spend their time in the workplace in order to earn living. However, It is not good for their children. During earlier ages, It's important to communicate with their children because they usually has a lot of problems on school life or friends. They need a parents who give a sincere advice for them. However, These days most parents don't spend their time with children. parents cannot give a useful advice for their children. It is a very serious social problems because these kinds of trends or behaviors make a negative social problems. Therefore, parents should try to spend their time with their children.
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===CORRECTION===
Sang Hyup: Yes, It's a very important problem in modern days.
Correction: Yes, It's a very common problem in nowadays.
Explanation: Choose the appropriate word on your sentence, when we say "important" it conradicts with the word "problem" because there's no such thing as giving importance to a problem but to give a solution on it. Using the word "common" is much preferably because this shows how this problem became usual to our environment today or "nowadays".
Sang Hyup: Theses days, most panrents spend their time in the workplace in order to earn living.
Correction: These days, most parents spend their time in the workplace in order to earn living.
Explanation: Just always take note of your spelling.
Sang Hyup: It's important to communicate with their children because they usually has a lot of problems on school life or friends.
Correction: It's important to communicate with their children because they usually have a lot of problems on school life or friends.
Explanation: use "have" instead of "has" because we a pertainig to the subject "children" that is in plural form. The subject should always agree to its verb.
===NOTES===
Hello Sang Hyup! Thank you for accomplishing you homework as quickly as possible. Ans yes, as I can see you are now really expressive when it comes to giving opinions. You can now also elaborate the idea being given based on what you understood. Keep up the good work! Always review the corrections and sooner you'll be surprised that you may no longer have corrections for your homework. I'll see you tomorrow. Bye! Take care.
~Teacher Carrie 