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My dream house.
작성자 : jes*** · 2014-05-19
rooms. There are fifty rooms. No one can come into our house. Just my family and I can.my house live on top of the rainbow.
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==========CORRECTED SENTENCES=============
My dream house is rainbow in color. It is very big. Inside my dream house, there is a television, toys, and lots of rooms. There are fifty rooms. No one can come into our house except for my family and I. My house is on top of the rainbow.
==========CORRECTIONS=============
1.
Christine: My dream house is rainbow colour.
Correct: My dream house is rainbow in color.
Explanation: You should be careful in choosing words used in your sentences. There are times when they create confusion and mean another thing. "Rainbow color" is just the color itself and nothing else but when you say "rainbow in color", it means that the subject's color is rainbow. They are different.
2.
Christine: Inside my dream house there are tv,toys,and lots of
rooms.
Correct: Inside my dream house, there is a television, toys, and lots of rooms.
Explanation:
* Study about the articles ( a, an, the ) that are appropriate to the subject. There are times that we need it, and sometimes where we don't. Practice the basic rules about articles.
* In subject verb agreement, when you are using there in a sentence, it is not the subject. The subject is followed by the verb where in this situation, it is a television. Since it is in the singular form, you should use the singular form of the verb.
* When writing a composition, you should be very formal with your words. It is encouraged to use the complete word instead of its abbreviation.3.
Christine: No one can come into our house. Just my family and I can.
Correct: No one can come into our house except for my family and I.
Explanation: It is important to know a wide array of vocabulary words. In this sentence, you can use "EXCEPT" to connote not including to make your sentence shorter and clearer to understand.
4.
Christine: my house live on top of the rainbow.
Correct: My house is on top of the rainbow.
Explanation: Your house is not a living thing so it is not appropriate to use the verb "live" in this sentence. Plainly just use the 'be' verb "is" before a singular subject.
============NOTES=============
Hi Christine! Good job on your homework today! I really think that your dream house will be really cool! I want to visit your dream house someday! Can I? See you on Wednesday, Christine! Take care!~
- T. Rose 